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Posted by: krymrgn
« on: November 11, 2019, 10:41:16 am »

This snip-it is from another WIP. (work in progress) It s the beginning to the third book in The Cup and the Blade series. Working Title: Infernal Coven

Infernal Coven

Prologue
Year of Our Lord: 1692

The Reverend Samuel Paris gathered the men together in the clearing near Jerimiah’s cabin in the forest. The glow of the bonfire in the center of the group cast shadows across their grim faces. Samuel opened his arms and spoke to the assembled. “I welcome you!” He found each set of eyes staring back at him and approved. He spread his hands wide and turned, as if to offer himself to the group. But they knew better. One of them had brought the infant child, screaming his anger, his fists flaying in the air.
“He shall be The One. Yet what we are about to attempt has never been done before. We are the GROUNDBREAKERS” Samuel’s voice rose as the wind began whipping the branches of hardwoods and evergreens around them. The scent of rain permeated the air as he continued. “We will live on through this child. He must accept all our power and more than live. He must thrive and yae build upon what we bestow upon him now. If this child survives, we will send him to a time where we will rule the world with our power. Wealth, Property, and Prowess shall be ours. Whatever wish and it will be granted! Prepare yourselves!”
Beyond the ring of sorcerer’s a snuffling and snorting mussed with the fallen pine needles and leaves, searching for grubs and other morsels. His Master had been imprisoned, her child lay within the ring of his mutilators. Creature. She called me her Creature. His deformed body ached with each movement. Slumped to all fours, his hands morphed to clumps of flesh with claws. His teeth, ground down in the back of his mouth, yet the front constantly tearing at his formless lips, pointed and jagged from the change. As he walked, his misshapen back rolled like the muscles of a tiger, yet bulged like a bear. What tufts of hair remained on his body wisped in the summer warmth. His blue eyes enlarged, dripped with infectious poison. He kept circling the group as they worked their magic. The rage within him growing.
Each sorcerer threw his cloak to the ground with theatrical flourish. They raised their hands to mirror The Reverend and began chanting. Tiny little orbs of transparent black bubbles sparkling with starlight shot from their extended fingers, floated around the child creating a vortex of malignant energy. As the power slipped from the sorcerer’s bodies, they changed. It began with the fingertips, puckering and shrinking. Their faces became gaunt, eyes haunted with the knowledge of sacrifice.
Samuel waved his skeletal hands, and cried out, “At the time of the last transfer, set to your minds the year 1996. Engrave to your memory the image of mother and birth. Feel the pain of her labor as your power shifts and is reborn to the world that awaits. Give to the child. Through HIM we shall be reborn.”
The sparkling bubbles, like tiny floating galaxies drifted down to the sobbing child. Each little bubble of energy hovered above the baby’s head, then descended as if suddenly overcome by gravity. As they hit the infant there was an audible POP and the sparkling energy encompassed the tiny body with an inky film, which slowly seeped into the babe’s skin.”
“Now gentlemen, think, while I summon the Master for the final act.”
Samuel’s hands waved through the air as he began to chant. The Creature, though fully aware and able to understand the things going on around him, could not discern what the sorcerer was chanting but it caused aches in his body. The temperature around the area dipped until condensation puffed out of the man’s mouth with each syllable. The Creature trembled with hatred.

The bonfire gave a loud crackling SNAP as it burst higher into the air. Something began to form within the flames. A shadow at first, if you can call darkness within a burning light shadow. The flames coalesced into a being, such a being that had never been seen in New England, yea on earth, and terror gripped the hearts of the men before it. It’s eyes were dark pools of black fire, as the rest of the wavering flames formed a torso; arms spurt forth in a shower of embers as the head formed around the already present lidless eyes.
Samuel fell to the ground in supplication. His hands stretched out on the ground before him. He spoke to the earth, yet his voice carried about the clearing. “We have gathered before you, ready, willing and able to complete our final task. Our power has been transferred, and the babe is ready. We ask only that you deliver the child to the time of destiny, the future year of 1996. Let the babe be born, and we will gather before you again when The Chosen has reached his potential.”
The fiery being leapt toward the sky, then it fell into a dive, landing upon the child in a brilliant rush of heat. As the flames died, and the area grew dark once again, the infant’s screams ceased.
The child was gone.

*
1996
Mrs. Putnam was in labor. Mr. Putnam stood beside his bride, her hand clasped inside his like a vice grip. “Come on, Honey you can do it! One more push!”
His wife screamed as the babe’s head crowned. “I can see your child Putnam’s! It’s coming! Push now, push!”
Mrs. Putnam gave a final howling cry as the Doctor pulled the pink baby from between her legs. Mr. Putnam smiled as his wife held their son for the very first time. “He’s perfect darling! You did a wonderful job!”
Mrs. Putnam was cooing at her son, as she pulled down her gown to bare her breast. As the baby boy latched on she grimaced, then smiled. “You do the honors…” She whispered to her husband.
“Caleb. His name will be Caleb Jerimiah Putnam.” He smiled down at his new born son and wife. His little son’s eyes sparkled with a dark blue light, as he suckled and stared at his mother. Jerimiah was filled with love.
“He’s perfect. My little Caleb.”
“That’s my boy!” He whispered down. He is my boy.
“He will certainly grow strong and proud, just like his papa. Give us a kiss, Daddy.”
“With pleasure my love.”
Mr. and Mrs. Putnam kissed each other, then took turns holding the new baby, Caleb.
*
Present day June 30, 2016
A darkness is gathering. Like a brewing storm in the heavens, a creeping black mist settles upon the river. The river not only bordered Kensie’s land, it wound around and down through to where Caleb lived. He could see the gathering darkness and Jerry taunted him constantly about it.
“They’re hereee…..”
Shut up! It’s just fog. There’s always fog on the river.
“But not this kind of fog and you know it! They are coming for you. It is OUR time now.”
If you don’t stop this incessant…
“You’ll what? Kill me? How are you going to accomplish that one? Oh you could kill yourself maybe, and just as you were to complete the task, my energy could take your weakened state over! Do it! Kill me! Kill you! They won’t have a problem with me. I’m ready!”
Caleb shook his head determined to stop entertaining Jerry. He wasn’t thinking of killing himself at all, but if he was honest with himself, he knew the fog wasn’t just fog.
Posted by: krymrgn
« on: October 09, 2019, 12:16:10 pm »

Hi There! I'm Kerry Morgan, founder of the board/group. I've been working on a story for quite a while now. It is a creepy creature mystery type. One of the things I'm excited about this story is it has local ties and lore. In short, Aliester Crowley once stay in Hebron I have taken that fact and ran with it. Just one of our local community members playing with the idea of our own "lake monster" sort of. :)

I have taken some liberties with the actual description of the area. This being a local group you may realize as you read that you can not in fact see the water or shore line from the General Store in Hebron. So I changed that to fit the story, as well as a couple other things. I some names may be recognized but they are used fictitiously and do not reflect anyone in particular. More represent their character until I get to that part in editing.

Ahhhh! Nervous! Here is the prologue and first chapter. I am looking for specific comments on issues with changing points of view, a scale from say 1 to 10 10 being pretty great- on the creepy factor. Is it effective or just not quite enough. As well as if flows well and is an interesting/creepy read. It is being edited so those types of corrections do not need to necessarily be listed.

Thanks For The Read!

                                                                                                        (Work in Progress)
                                                                       (Working Title) Aiwass of Pasquaney Bay (May change)

Sherriff Austin Travers brain took a minute to process what his eyes were seeing. Out on his regular morning patrol he was gifted with discovering the body of the local nut case. The sheer violence of the death clued him in. This wasn’t your run of the mill gang of hoodlums claiming Fealty and Love to Aiwass of Pasquaney Bay. Spirit Goddess conjured by the Sorcerer Allister Crowley with painted up ritual sacrifices; no one in his town could really do this. This wasn’t connected to any hoax. This was real.

A twisted grin crept across his face as he kicked the bloated face of Amy Crowley. Aleister’s Grandson and heir, father to Edward. “It wasn’t like Edde would mind, he’d probably dance upon the remains himself. No one talked about it, but everybody knew there was no love loss there.”

An eye socket burst with tiny spider like creatures racing across the decaying facial skin. Austin jumped away, his left foot jerked from underneath him. Several vines of milfoil wrapped around as his ankle keeping him down fighting against an unnatural tide.

The Sherriff struggled against the pull of the waves keeping the decomposing body bumping against his lower half. An ooze the color of rotting seaweed crept down the side of Amy’s skull, hair and mucus dripping upon his shoe, burning his flesh like acid. The more exposed flesh the slime tainted the more the spider crabs had to feed upon; infecting him with each pierce of fang or claw. As the tide pulsed so did his agony.

*

The morning Amy’s Crowley’s body was found, strangled within an invasive milfoil on the shore of Pasquaney Bay, Sherriff Austin Travers was taken to the emergency room having been infected by an unknown substance, also eating away at the body of Amy Crowley. Austin was in the Intensive Care Unit in critical condition at Lakes Region Mercy Hospital. His son Kelton, also working for the County Sherriff’s office, was on duty and hot on the case.

*

Edward Crowley startled at the notification sound buzzing through his back pocket. He was crouched at the shoreline of Alki Beach on Puget Sound in Seattle Washington. He was gathering samples of a toxic algae found to be killing the plant and wildlife creating a dangerous Red Tide. He carefully set down the vial and small stainless steel ladle exchanging them for his phone. Voicemail. There was only one number that would come through his security settings when he was out in the field.

Home.




He was now waiting for take-off deep in coach in the very last window seat. The view left much to be desired his gaze fell to several brochures stuffed haphazardly in the back of the chair in front of him. He reached for his home towns.

Just north of Concord New Hampshire, you will discover a natural paradise. A sleepy rural town called Pasquaney Bay; named for the pride and joy of sharing the great lake.

The photo stretched out the length of the brochures three folds. Sparkling clean glacier waters, gently rippling, casting reflections of bursting sunlight.
 Centuries past, the local natives had named the lake, the place where birch bark is found for canoes, an appropriate name indeed.
His own memories mixed with the descriptions being advertised. Most of the lake front was surrounded by towering birch trees. Silvers shimmering with their golden-grey skinned bark, next to white as bright as the moon, their leafy greens offering dappled sunlight to the forest floors growing right to the water’s edge. Photographers from every corner of the world came for their once in a lifetime shot of the colors at sunset. Notoriety even touched the town as one of the great grandmothers in the area had been quite famous in her time.
Kaleen Adams was the great granddaughter of Evangeline Adams, astrologer extraordinaire. Her family’s story was as famous as her very best friend’s Eddie Crowley, but not quite so tainted. Or if so in a different manner. Evangeline was considered a jewel in the town’s history, where as poor Eddie’s family name was not spoken with pride. None of the town elders had ever used Eddie’s Grandfather’s name and reputation as a selling point for tourists.
The last town flyer and internet ad had featured a black and white photo of her Great Grandmother barely smiling to the camera.

 “Come sit under the same stars which spoke to the queen of Wall Street, Evangeline Adams. Hear what they might have to whisper to you next to the peaceful waters of Pasquaney Bay.”

Eddie liked that one better. He shoved the brochure under his right leg and tried to drift off as the plane shook, racing down the runway lifting into the sky.


Chapter One

Kayleen Adams stood on her back porch sipping from a hot mug of tea. Her home sat across the street from the center of town which offered her a rich view of the crystal blue waters of Pasquaney Bay glittering in the sunlight. Her gaze was drawn away from the beauty, to a mother stepping out of the general store. Texting furiously on her smart phone, she hefted her hip to better grip her bag of groceries. Her crisp blond hair smashed to her head in the heat. 
Tapply Thompson, otherwise known as Old Man Tap, the beloved town’s richest recluse rocked in a wooden chair on the other side of the swinging screen door the mother had exited from. His gnarled staff grinding a circle against the plank wooden floor. His light gray eyes scanned the lake, watching the scene before him silently. His scruffy stubble sticking out from his chin like little gray spikes, full dry lips worrying at the long wooden pipe extended from his mouth. 
The mother glanced up and saw her son tossing rocks into the lake. Plunk… Plunk… The woman continued to meander her way down the little concrete steps leading to the sparse parking lot. She never looked up from the little blue screen as she dangled her keys at the car door lock, calling out to her son.
“Come on now Maxi! Time to go!”
The boy turned after throwing one last rock, he punched his hips with balled up fists, screaming back at his mother, “I told you not to call me that. I’m not a girl! It’s MaAHAHAHAHAH…”
His protest was cut off mid-sentence as a blood curdling cry erupted from his throat. His mother finally looked up from her phone in time to see her son being lifted into the air by long seaweed covered tentacles. She startled, screaming, and ran toward the water desperate to get to her son. Oranges from the discarded bag of groceries rolling after her on the hot asphalt. Max’s face was turning beat red under the pressure of the squeezing. The mother lifted her hands as the living slime raised her son higher as if claiming victory before dropping underneath the surface without creating a single ripple.
“Max!” the mother screamed as she crashed into the Bay, whipping back and forth, searching for her son.
Max was gone.
As the shrill sound of terror echoed through the Bay, Kayleen slammed her mug on the deck railing and took off for the lake.
“Of course everything awful would start up again. What a welcome home!” She cursed as she scanned the parking lot up to the steps of the store. Even as she ran she shivered. She was trying to help, but Old Man Tap rocked on, calm as calm could be.


Thanks for the read and I look forward to any thoughts!
Kerry

(Okay I started us out...)